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On 04/07/13 00:29, Torsten Grote wrote:
On Monday 01 July 2013 00:26:23 Torsten Grote wrote:
If you like, please provide feedback for everything that can be improved without major changes.
Thanks a lot everyone for your feedback!
You spotted some important stuff and also some tiny details which I would have missed otherwise. With your help, this flyer will turn out to be awesome! :)
thanks for your effort and quick improvements!
Some people didn't like the font and someone suggested Roboto. I did the headline of the first page in Roboto. What do you think?
Your mean "Free Your Android!" ? I don't like that font very much. The letters are too high in contrast to how narrow they are.
Please let me know if I've missed something!
On the Front side, as a bullet point under "Get Free Apps", I would integrate Free Software in the end, like: Get Free Apps: - [...] - No Google Account * - Solely Free Software * I think that's is an important information that should be visible on the front-page. Else it could be misunderstood (by random guys passing by) as "just another ad that promises something with no ads and free of charge"
On the middle page: "Like the Free Your Android campaign [...]" - -> "Like _this_ Free Your Android campaign [...]"? Else people might think what is "the FYA campaign"?
"[...] there are many ways to contribute." - -> Somehow, I am missing a connection between the text and the following link. I would either end with a colon, or - maybe better - add a new sentence "Find out how:", "Find more information:", "Please look at:"
"Your donations are critical to our strength and autonomy. Join the Fellowship to enable us [...]" - -> I would start with a general statement and then ask for direct help ("you") and I do not like so much the imperative used in the second sentence. Rewritten proposal: "Donations are critical to our strength and help us to act autonomous. You can support us by joining the Fellowship and enable us [...]" And at the end of the sentence, for my feeling, the same is true what I have mentioned above: To get a direct connection between the text and the following link, I would end the sentence with a colon.
On the left page: I am not happy with the first paragraph. What is the message here? - F-Droid is free of charge - Google Play and Apples App store are also mostly free of charge - Free Software is not about price I just can imagine here what should be the message. Maybe: - Most apps are free of charge, google as well as apple. - the same is true for f-droid where all of them are free of charge - but this is not the point, because free software is not about the price ?? But still: Why mix the Free Software message now with Google and Apple. Reading it again, I get the feeling that F-Droid, Google and Apple are the same, they are all app-stores. While the whole Flyer is there to explain the opposite...
Second last paragraph: "Even though you may not have the skills to directly exercise all of your freedom, you [...]" I think this should be plural, "all of your freedomS", no? but I wonder: Do people understand what freedoms you are talking about here? Especially as the explaining box is still to come ...
François suggested a F-Droid poster. We have a general Free Your Android poster printed already. I'm not sure we need a dedicated one for F-Droid.
By now, I don't think so. Are you in contact with the f-droid install party guys? They maybe have something alike.
I also copied the text in the Etherpad, again: http://etherpad.guifi.net/SzP2U1V284
best regards, Erik
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