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Hi Torsten,
On 01/07/13 00:26, Torsten Grote wrote:
with the help of Matthias I finally managed to finish the F-Droid flyer I started to work on a long time ago.
thanks for working on this!
If you like, please provide feedback for everything that can be improved without major changes.
as the others already pointed out some typos I would like to wait for my own proofreading until there is the new version - else I have to fear to constantly repeat typos that are already seen.
In general, I think the Flyer is a very good idea and it is also very well done. And after this back-slapping some additional thoughts:
- The introduction might be improved, esp the first sentence. Or which audience do we like to reach? The user that already knows something about FS? Obviously not, because else there wouldn't be a need for the backcover that explains what Free Software is. But then I would begin with another sentence in the Inlay. 'Cause now it starts with "Think of F-Droid more as a repository than a store" -> I can imagine that people do not know what a repository is. Even worse: They might know / have heard that a repository is "something with Linux" and something they will never understand. So they might think that it is better to keep for the store. We could easily work around this problem by turning the sentence/argumentation around. "F-Droid is not the typical store where you buy something. Instead, it is a catalogue (or repository) of Free Software applications for the Android platform." BTW: The following sentence is not a good read cause it is missing an object. Better version would be: "USING IT, you can easily ..." or "F-Droid allows you to ..." or something alike
- I like the idea of a direct download link, that makes it so much easier to install for other people! Just one question: Are we sure that the link will not change? Did you had some discussion with the F-Droid team about this?
- The section about "some available apps": I wonder how did you selsct the given choice? I remember that I found Mustard somehow better than Twidere as you could more easily switch from one account to another. Or what about Kontalk - a whatsapp replacement or owncloud?
- I have the feeling in the section "Liberate your entire phone" that the sentence "Do you want a mobile device that does not spy on you?" is out o context as the paragraph before and thereafter are talking about freedom not privacy.
- On the backside I am missing a paragraph stating something like: "This flyer is printed by the FSFE because we support F-Droids efforts to spread freedom on mobile phones. The Free Software Foundation Europe is a non-profit organisation [...]" Else I have to think too much to get the link.
Same comments are in the etherpad
best regards, Erik
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